my escape
my temptation
gone
it hurts
to do
the right thing
was hard
was easy
releasing the rope
without me inside
I sent it away
wishing it would stay
Yeah there is tremendous loss in here. Metaphorically speaking, it sounds like "tough love". The kind of poem a mother might wright about a child that she needs to kick out of the house.
I view it more as sacrifice than tough love, but I see how you can get that tough vibe. Plus, you don't know the whole story that's going on in my head.
I'm also surprised you didn't see the "trick" I used in this one. But then, I guess most wouldn't think about it and it's not that obvious.
See, this is why poetry (and all writing in general, I guess) is amazing. I saw one thing when I wrote it and you saw an entirely different thing when you read it. And I can totally understand how you saw that.
I feel the loss in this poem.
ReplyDeleteYeah there is tremendous loss in here. Metaphorically speaking, it sounds like "tough love". The kind of poem a mother might wright about a child that she needs to kick out of the house.
ReplyDeleteI view it more as sacrifice than tough love, but I see how you can get that tough vibe. Plus, you don't know the whole story that's going on in my head.
DeleteI'm also surprised you didn't see the "trick" I used in this one. But then, I guess most wouldn't think about it and it's not that obvious.
I get the sense of a toxic relationship. It's better that they are apart, but it hurts not to be together.
ReplyDeleteSee, this is why poetry (and all writing in general, I guess) is amazing. I saw one thing when I wrote it and you saw an entirely different thing when you read it. And I can totally understand how you saw that.
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