The goldfish bowl teetered back and forth as its occupants raced around in panic. The Giant watched them through the glass, giggling at their piteous cries for help, their attempts at escape.
“How many times have I told you not to bring humans into the house?” A shriek and a sharp slap to the head for the Giant. “Take them outside, now! And quit your sniveling.”
The Giant trudged outside with his prize, pouting. Then he unceremoniously flipped the fishbowl upside down and watched as the figures fell, screaming, to the ground.
Sunday, March 20, 2011
A 92 Word Story - Second Crusader Challenge
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Aww! The poor things! I like the child giant [g]
ReplyDeleteHaha, this is too awesome, Brooke! What if Byron was the giant? Then those humans would really be in trouble. xD
ReplyDeleteNice job. I was trying to convey a similar situation (giant child) but I think you've gotten the idea across more directly.
ReplyDelete@Madeline Oh yes, if Leo ever made Byron into a Giant, we'd be doomed.
ReplyDelete@Callie Really? I thought I was the only one into Giants. XD I'll have to go check yours out.
Ooh I love it! :O)
ReplyDeleteLOL, this theme of giants is very entertaining. This was fun, thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteI think this might be one of my favorite pieces so far. Love it!
ReplyDeleteCool! Something besides goldfish in the bowl, how clever of you. :) Reminds me of a show I used to watch as a kid, Land of the Giants. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteDifferent. Giant child, how terrifying! Nice flash piece.
ReplyDeleteNikki
Entertaining and different. The giant child sounded no more horrible than various human children I have known.
ReplyDeleteOhhhh - I like it. Makes me feel a little bad for all those goldfish I flushed as a kid =)
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad that everyone likes it. ^^ Gives me a nice confidence boost, and who couldn't use one of those?
ReplyDeleteWow- very different take- I like it!
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome - I love it but I feel sorry for the people. lol
ReplyDeleteGreat idea. Makes me feel sorry for the spiders I occasionally wash down the drain. (in my defence, there are limited options when you're in the shower!)
ReplyDelete*shudders* Second giant take on this flash fiction challenge I've read. Giants freak me out! Haha! Maybe that's why I am so sympathetic to bugs and spiders, I'm the type to go out of my way to rescue them. Lol! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHoly crap! I wonder if that's what little bugs think when I make my daughter take them back outside (she's always carrying in worms, and spiders in jars--drives me crazy).
ReplyDeleteOkay, I'll be more careful when dumping them out.
Very good, Brooke. And thank you for the award. What a sweetheart!
~Angela
Ooh! I shouldn't laugh, but LOL :) Great post.
ReplyDeleteHugs,
Rach
Haha! I was picturing my kids' reactions when I want them to take the toad/snail/lizard/cricket/earthworm out of the house. Priceless!
ReplyDeleteSo sorry I haven't been following you all this time, fellow Crusader. Every time I think I've visited everyone, I discover another wonderful blog I missed. My error is rectified now!
Love the unique take. Very fun.
ReplyDeleteFirst time I've read about a goldfish bowl that didn't have any water or fish in it.
ReplyDeleteNice writing "outside the bowl."
Yes, I'm always wondering what the bug feels like when it gets squished. -shudders-
ReplyDeleteThanks again to all of you. ^^
I must be evil because this story made me laugh :)
ReplyDeleteGreat story!
Ooh, that's clever!
ReplyDeleteLove this one. Reversal of position. THe humans live in the goldfish bowl. Who are they and how did they get there? Inquiring minds want to know. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI like the giant child idea. Feel bad for the folks though. Hopefully he doesn't step on them!
ReplyDeleteWow. Very interesting. I really like your take on this!
ReplyDeleteOh boy. It's interesting to see a darker take on the prompt. You packed a lot in to such a little space!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad Giants seem to be a big source of interest. It gives me hope for my WIP. XD
ReplyDeleteAnd yet again, I thank you all.
Hello. I'm helping Rachael Harrie judge this contest. I'm posting to let you know that your entry has been shortlisted as one of the top 5 in the judging round. Great job!
ReplyDeleteFollow-up post to let you know that your entry is in the final round. Rachael will be announcing the winner next week.
ReplyDeleteReally?! You don't know how big I'm smiling right now. I'm never going to be able to get to sleep. lol ^^
ReplyDeleteOoo, congrats Brooke! That's awesome :D
ReplyDeleteAaack! Poor humans! The second crusader group had the same challenge. I read most of them at the time. I think yours is still one of the best.
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