tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post6578299137095162041..comments2023-10-11T05:06:04.185-05:00Comments on Paper Mountain: Prompt #37: Seriously, it was the worst thing I could have chosen to choke on.Brooke R. Bussehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post-5482492662321617602011-09-27T18:19:32.260-05:002011-09-27T18:19:32.260-05:00I tried to show it at the beginning, when she rubs...I tried to show it at the beginning, when she rubs her face and is happy that it's smooth. I guess I could add a few more subtle hints if I ever revise these.Brooke R. Bussehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post-50500090148594410592011-09-27T14:15:18.014-05:002011-09-27T14:15:18.014-05:00Where was it indicated that Cirabel was young? Whe...Where was it indicated that Cirabel was young? When she ran her fingers over her wrinkled face and said "No, No, No" I didn't think that she was saying that because she was old. I just thought she was old and hadn't died yet and she wanted to die. I dunno...I guess that I think that not dying after having outlived all your loved ones would make you long for death...kinda like the dude in the Green Mile.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post-27692569476524093562011-09-26T17:41:03.091-05:002011-09-26T17:41:03.091-05:00You kind of have it backwards. Cirabel is old and ...You kind of have it backwards. Cirabel is old and wants a cure to make her immortal, but in a forever young way. Her tonic makes her temporarily beautiful. The 'cure' makes her immortal, but she's stuck in her older body.Brooke R. Bussehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post-34826011317856698582011-09-26T11:51:33.280-05:002011-09-26T11:51:33.280-05:00Cirabel has eternal youth and longs to grow old. B...Cirabel has eternal youth and longs to grow old. But in finding the cure for her eternal youth, she discovered at the last moment that she didn't like it and tried to stop it. So the thing worked...she just had second thoughts. That's my take.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post-19777518121606153922011-09-25T18:33:33.851-05:002011-09-25T18:33:33.851-05:00I am going to ask you what I ask pretty much every...I am going to ask you what I ask pretty much everyone when they mention mystery and such in my stories... What did you think was going on?Brooke R. Bussehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8223068889792863979.post-29183190060778043492011-09-25T12:52:28.631-05:002011-09-25T12:52:28.631-05:00Interesting. The writing is good and clear, and t...Interesting. The writing is good and clear, and the mystery surrounding the peasant and Cirabel is well-played out. I also like the implications and how nothing is ever really spelled out in full.Elisa DeLanyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06466740168508428362noreply@blogger.com